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Apparently, Beautiful, and Confused: Hi Morning Your holiday Monday off to a good start? Monday 09:15 Yes nice what r u looking for on tinder Monday 12:13 Nothing specific. I'm not around for long Monday 18:15 Ok Today 06:20 I feel the hunger on foreign skin, wants to absorb the scent of foreign skin, I want to drill my teeth into your flesh Draw marks on my skin with my nails. I want to feel how you give yourself to me, how you become soft and yielding, deliver you, just feel, just give, until you melt helpless in my arms I want to drink you empty like a sweet fruit, absorb your pain and moans into me Take heat and give it. Playing on your nipples, until your moans penetrate my ear like a beautiful melody. l want to touch, dominate, explore to the last corner of your soul And then start over. Slowly. Persevering. Relish I let your soul slip through my hands, shape and encourage you Protect you. I will kiss your tears away. Find you nice. Over and over again Today 07:49 Today 08:21 ....huh? When was ur last sex Today 09:32 I'm very confused about the turn this conversation has taken I thought you were looking for feedback on your....poetry. Or whatever that was Did u read the poem? I did. Are you looking for constructive feedback? Sent GIF Type a message... I did. Are you looking for constructive feedback? I am lookin for a feedback about what u feel it u like it Well, some of your metaphors are a little off. l'd also look at breaking out the old thesaurus the use of 'foreign skin' twice in two lines and 'moans' twice in one stanza could do with changing up. Also, beginning stanzas 2,3 & 4 with 'l want' is a good device, but you need to carry it through to the rest of the stanzas for it to really be effective Also very unsure on the find you nice' line All together it's a good beginning effort Sent GIF Type a message.. Do u like this type of sex Surely the sex in the poem is a metaphor for death though? It's not intended to be read literally as a sex act Do u read the dominant part? Yes, I want to touch [... last corner of your soul' - death is the ultimate dominator, and through the end of life manages to reach through to the very ends of our souls There is a feeling of rebirth, new life in this stanza though 'and then start over [...] persevering Maybe this is more about loss and finding oneself again than it is about death Sent GIF Type a message.. Do u like domiant men? The world is full of dominant men and it doesn't seem to be working so well for it Sent Type a message GIF .. Apparently not ready for the literary critique
Apparently, Beautiful, and Confused: Hi
 Morning
 Your holiday Monday off to a
 good start?
 Monday 09:15
 Yes nice what r u looking for on
 tinder
 Monday 12:13
 Nothing specific. I'm not around
 for long
 Monday 18:15
 Ok
 Today 06:20
 I feel the hunger on foreign
 skin,
 wants to absorb the scent of
 foreign skin,
 I want to drill my teeth into your
 flesh
 Draw marks on my skin with my
 nails.
 I want to feel how you give
 yourself to me,
 how you become soft and
 yielding,
 deliver you, just feel, just give,
 until you melt helpless in my
 arms
 I want to drink you empty like a
 sweet fruit,
 absorb your pain and moans
 into me
 Take heat and give it. Playing
 on your nipples,
 until your moans penetrate my
 ear like a beautiful melody.
 l want to touch, dominate,
 explore
 to the last corner of your soul
 And then start over.
 Slowly. Persevering. Relish
 I let your soul slip through my
 hands,
 shape and encourage you
 Protect you.
 I will kiss your tears away.
 Find you nice. Over and over
 again

 Today 07:49
 Today 08:21
 ....huh?
 When was ur last sex
 Today 09:32
 I'm very confused about the turn
 this conversation has taken
 I thought you were looking for
 feedback on your....poetry. Or
 whatever that was
 Did u read the poem?
 I did. Are you looking for
 constructive feedback?
 Sent
 GIF
 Type a message...

 I did. Are you looking for
 constructive feedback?
 I am lookin for a feedback
 about what u feel it u like it
 Well, some of your metaphors
 are a little off. l'd also look at
 breaking out the old thesaurus
 the use of 'foreign skin' twice
 in two lines and 'moans' twice
 in one stanza could do with
 changing up. Also, beginning
 stanzas 2,3 & 4 with 'l want' is
 a good device, but you need
 to carry it through to the rest
 of the stanzas for it to really be
 effective
 Also very unsure on the find you
 nice' line
 All together it's a good
 beginning effort
 Sent
 GIF
 Type a message..

 Do u like this type of sex
 Surely the sex in the poem is a
 metaphor for death though? It's
 not intended to be read literally
 as a sex act
 Do u read the dominant part?
 Yes, I want to touch [... last
 corner of your soul' - death is
 the ultimate dominator, and
 through the end of life manages
 to reach through to the very
 ends of our souls
 There is a feeling of rebirth, new
 life in this stanza though 'and
 then start over [...] persevering
 Maybe this is more about loss
 and finding oneself again than it
 is about death
 Sent
 GIF
 Type a message..

 Do u like domiant men?
 The world is full of dominant
 men and it doesn't seem to be
 working so well for it
 Sent
 Type a message
 GIF
 ..
Apparently not ready for the literary critique

Apparently not ready for the literary critique